Rochelle Skorka
Santana
September 21, 2012
Deductive Outline

 

Thesis:  It is fundamental for us as humans to make connections to the spaces we encounter and turn them into places where we can connect to and find a sense of belonging
(Found in the conclusion, not so strongly in introduction: FIX THAT!)

Main Points:

Paragraph ½ (should be one paragraph):

·         “space” is transformed into a “place” when it becomes meaningful to an individual

·         it is individuals themselves who must connect with a locality **redundant?

·         Hassy has become more than just a dining hall because of the people and the intimate connections they have made there ****use details to explain why I’ve come to that conclusion

·         *****need to explain why it’s important to connect to the space

 

 

Paragraph 3:

·         It is human nature to have a sense of belonging and places are the portals which allow us to develop that feeling of connection. ****should be in introduction? Much like thesis statement

·         Feelings of being bonded to a community are important for an individual’s self-worth, their well-being, their involvement in their own work, and their success

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Complain but still go there? (5^th ave./polk street) Looking in on place from window without experiencing the place=no connection, no sense of belonging, just a space, not a place- known as the street, not home

 

Conclusion